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jak the fallen
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i am known as jak the fallen, a powerful necrmancer on a search for revenge,
my story starts many years ago, i come from the once proud deathpalm family,
it was a well respected family of necros, we had a small settlement in the vast
forests of cantha. most of us tried to stay out of the way when ever the conflict
between the clans started, but some of our people left to go fight for our
kurzick home. for a long time, we never had to worry about anything,
our settlement was a long ways away from the jade sea, surrounded by forest,
but i only wish that we had been more prepared.
at the time, i was still in training to learn spells and how to fight.
one day i went on a walk with my families pet shadow, i took him everywhere
with me. on my way back home, i started to see smoke, i was thinking that
maby they were already starting a fire to cook, wich was strainge since we
already had dinner. when i got to the outlineing trees of our village,
everything was on fire, everyone fighting these dark figures,
it was night and hard to see, all i could realy see clearly was my home
on fire and i had to listen to everyone suffering. all i could do is sit there
and wait for it to be over, after what seemed to be a life time,
the beasts left in a flash leaving everything burning, i didnt know what to do.
i started walking into the village, i didnt find anyone left, no survivers,
not even anybodies. i was standing there in shock till a tall skinny
figure shrouded in a black robe and hood grabed me by the neck and said
"so theres still one little rat left, hmm what should i do to you, kill you?
no, i think ill just let you suffer as the last of your bloodline, i just
love makeing people suffer, have a horrobel life you insect" then he tossed me
into a pile of wood, luckily i had shadow stay in the woods.
in the morning when i woke up in a daze, shadow was by my side,
i was trying to think of what to do when i had remebered that there was
a monestary to train students, despite my huge loss, i had to move on and be strong
so i packed up all that i could salvage and shadow and i were of to start training,
but one thing is for sure, i will never forget what happened and i shall revenge
my family, and that is why i am marked as jak the fallen.
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| 03/01/07 11:05 |
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jak the fallen
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this is a story i came up with for my fav. charr jak the fallen, i hope yall like it, its realy fun makeing background stories for ur chars, use ur imagination, its fun ^^
 
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| 03/01/07 11:08 |
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Balthamos
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It's not a bad little story, having character history is always fun and allows you to inject a little personality.
Next time I would run it through a spell checker first even though they aren't always accurate. I hope you don't mind that I took the liberty of doing this for you to make it easier for everyone else to read. I've only changed one phrase near the beginning to make the grammar easier.
| QUOTE | I am known as Jak The Fallen, a powerful necromancer on a search for revenge, my story starts many years ago. I come from the once proud Deathpalm family, a once well respected family of necromancers. We had a small settlement in the vast forests of Cantha. Most of us tried to stay out of the way when ever the conflict between the clans started, but some of our people left to go fight for our Kurzick home. For a long time, we never had to worry about anything, our settlement was a long ways away from the jade sea, surrounded by forest, but I only wish that we had been more prepared.
At the time, I was still in training to learn spells and how to fight. One day I went on a walk with my families pet shadow, I took him everywhere with me. On my way back home, I started to see smoke; I was thinking that maybe they were already starting a fire to cook, which was strange since we
already had dinner. when I got to the outlining trees of our village, everything was on fire, everyone fighting these dark figures, it was night and hard to see, all I could really see clearly was my home on fire and I had to listen to everyone suffering. All I could do is sit there
and wait for it to be over, after what seemed to be a life time, the beasts left in a flash leaving everything burning; I didn’t know what to do. I started walking into the village; I didn’t find anyone left, no survivors, not even anybodies. I was standing there in shock till a tall skinny
figure shrouded in a black robe and hood grabbed me by the neck and said, "So there’s still one little rat left, hmm what should I do to you, kill you? No, I think ill just let you suffer as the last of your bloodline, I just love making people suffer, have a horrible life you insect" then he tossed me into a pile of wood, luckily I had shadow stay in the woods.
In the morning when I woke up in a daze, shadow was by my side, I was trying to think of what to do when I had remembered that there was a monastery to train students, despite my huge loss, I had to move on and be strong
so I packed up all that I could salvage and shadow and I were of to start training, but one thing is for sure, I will never forget what happened and I shall revenge my family, and that is why I am marked as Jak The Fallen. |
***THIS POST HAS BEEN EDITED***
Edgwalkers is coming.
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| 03/01/07 11:27 |
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jak the fallen
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lol, thnx, im not a realy the type of person to spell check and stuff, besides, if u spend most of ur time on the computer and talkin to ppl like this < ur grammer starts to get bad ^^
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| 03/01/07 11:37 |
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The Nickromancer
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Lots of people post stories in the articles section, perhaps you could post it there
Curse imageshack....
smoked all the rest of my sigs ¬_¬
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| 03/01/07 11:58 |
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Tae Lia
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As balthamos already said, mind some of the smaller details nicely done though ^^
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